literature

Being lonely

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Literature Text

 Daydream of
                                       
     Conversation I wish
                                               
   I had
                                     
         They speak of
                                       
  Relationships of the past
                                       
           That never carried on
                                       
     I was forgotten all along
                                       
               With everyone I befriended
:iconking-doodles: requested this a long time ago.
It's a lot shorter than what I usually write.
Hope you guys liked it and opinions are welcome!
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Medoriko's avatar
:heart: Critique from PowerfulWriting

I really like this piece. I think a lot of people can relate to this at any stage in their life, as it can be hard sometimes to find companionship or feeling like you are wanted amongst your peers. This kind of poem really tugs at the heart strings, as it is also beautifully written. The italics give it a nice touch and goes nicely with the somewhat delicate tone. I also like the structure of the piece, although it is a bit random I find. But that is just a personal opinion really. 

I'd say a great job overall :)