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 Daydream of
                                       
     Conversation I wish
                                               
   I had
                                     
         They speak of
                                       
  Relationships of the past
                                       
           That never carried on
                                       
     I was forgotten all along
                                       
               With everyone I befriended
:iconking-doodles: requested this a long time ago.
It's a lot shorter than what I usually write.
Hope you guys liked it and opinions are welcome!
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2015  Student Writer
:heart: Critique from PowerfulWriting

I really like this piece. I think a lot of people can relate to this at any stage in their life, as it can be hard sometimes to find companionship or feeling like you are wanted amongst your peers. This kind of poem really tugs at the heart strings, as it is also beautifully written. The italics give it a nice touch and goes nicely with the somewhat delicate tone. I also like the structure of the piece, although it is a bit random I find. But that is just a personal opinion really. 

I'd say a great job overall :)
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BreathlessDragon Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014   Traditional Artist
Oh. It's so sad. But I totally understand... Really Sad 
It's short, but it reflects everything about being lonely.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But, you can always find a reason to smile.
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Glad you liked it.
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BreathlessDragon Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014   Traditional Artist
:) (Smile) 
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Muffeli Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014
I like it~
And it doesn't need to be long to be good!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Great!
I was worried that it was too short.
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Muffeli Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014
No, it's good like that! 
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad!
:D
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Muffeli Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014
:3
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