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I don’t know if you feel it too, the feeling of wanting to break loose
And just screaming “I love you” but I’m scared that we might lose
Because just of our age, or the time, or any person that doesn’t want you to be mine
But I know that if this goes wrong I’d be the one who'd cause the crime

I’m a bit afraid; one false move would make everything go away
And I’m always left wondering if what I’m doing is okay
I just want everything to be alright between you and me
Or is there something that I cannot see?

My head is rambling with questions that fear is inventing
Maybe is not fear, maybe it’s because I’m too caring
Am I paranoid? I don’t want to make a mistake
You said I’m doing things right, then why do I always shake?
Isn't this a bit personal? Yea, I think it is.
Though, few people could relate to the "I DUNNO WHAT I'M DOING, IS THIS RIGHT!?" thing.
Have you gone through something similar?
Thank you for reading! I'd like to know your opinion
(This isn't romantic, is it :iconsadfaceplz:)


And always remember, I :iconluvluvplz: you people.
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:icondragonfiresoul:
DragonFireSoul Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
omg...somebody get me some tissues...
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*hands a tissue*
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:icondragonfiresoul:
DragonFireSoul Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks :3
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:iconkk-crossing:
KK-Crossing Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
;n; this is my entire life right here~
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Darn...
Want to talk about it?
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:iconkk-crossing:
KK-Crossing Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I'm alright, bby<3 thank you for offering, I might take you up on it in notes sometime uwu
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sure!
I'll be waiting.
:iconadoration-plz:
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:icongingerheart222:
GingerHeart222 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This. This describes my entire life. I love it 
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kind of sucky though D:
But thank you!
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:iconfoxstar-eternalflame:
FoxStar-EternalFlame Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm touched ;^;
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very much.
:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconrobbybot:
robbybot Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
definitely can relate to this, really wish i did not but sadly nothing i can do no matter how much i want to.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Keep your head up.
You can't be sad forever.
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:iconnoorelven:
noorelven Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
wow!
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Again thank you!
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:iconnoorelven:
noorelven Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
welcome :D
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ImRandomArtist Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
umm yeah I can relate to the IDK WTF I'm doing and stuff, though can't really relate to the wanting to tell someone you love them, usually I'm holding back just tackling someone and beating them up or screaming "FUCK OFF YOU ARE GODDAMED ANNOYING!" ...so...yeah... though I like how you worded what you feel ^^
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks... I guess?
Anger is bad...
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:iconimrandomartist:
ImRandomArtist Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
I ramble too much :S, long conversation short, I like how you worded it, like the idea and concept, though I haven't experience it so can't relate that well.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's cool.
It's bad to be scared of loosing a person... Though sometimes you can't help it...
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:iconimrandomartist:
ImRandomArtist Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
huh, I entertained the thought of losing my family before when I was a kid, kinda broke down...still have a bad effect on me now years later, remember sitting there with her praying but stopped since keep thinking about it wasn't good for me so now I'm just gonna live and cross that bridge when I get there
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Just like one amazing person first told told me "Just let it flow"... Or what is "Go with the flow"?... I have forgotten... No! I'm pretty sure it was go with the flow... Anyways, always be happy and such!
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:iconstarnoyume:
starnoyume Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
This is exactly what I am thinking about whenever I approach the people around me, especially the ones that I love.
You're really good at expressing thoughts. well done!!!
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I try my best :iconblushplz:
:iconadoration-plz:
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julyrainxo Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Photographer
It's not super personal, I post things a lot more personal, and I think its fine(:
I love this btw, so much
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
I just wrote something that some people need to hear.
:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconmusicmaumau:
MusicMauMau Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
This is a great piece, I like it a lot. Can't say I'm in this situation, but I understand it completely. Haven't seen this feeling put into words so well and clearly as you did with this. Great job. :)
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :iconblushplz:
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TheLoneWolf117 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Absolutely beautiful, and quite an inspiration. Very powerful words to express some deep set worries. You found the words to express something I've felt as well. But lately no words come to me when i need to express myself. Flawless poetry my boy.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you good sir.
I'm happy I could match your feelings :D
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Mikoto02 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
This somehow sums up my feelings into short words that I could never find before. That fear of not knowing if your instincts are true or if it's fear distorting things is one of the hardest things I've ever had to deal with. I'm glad I'm at least not alone~<3
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry, you are never alone :D
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Mikoto02 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
<3
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:iconzakesque:
Zakesque Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
This is awesome. I can relate.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you sir :D
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:iconzakesque:
Zakesque Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
You're very welcome. It reminds me of a simplified version of what runs through my mind on an average day. xD Dunno if that's a good thing or not, but regardless, I like this piece.
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:iconsincerelyrandom:
SincerelyRandom Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
My situation is exactly thus. Thank you for posting.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, I'll be here all week... And month... And year... You know what? I just be here.
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:iconnan-a-mour:
nan-a-mour Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can relate to this, although my situation is probably quite different from yours... I hope things aren't always like this for you, makes me hope they won't eternally remain in this state for me too.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Everything does get better if you stay positive and trust your gut.
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StephZabatiero Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
it's really like something I'm passin' by. It really touched me
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad I could touch your emotions.
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HeyArnoldfan7734 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This poem is absolutely beautiful! I can really relate, as well, as I'm going through this exact situation right now. I wrote a poem to one of my closest friends explaining that I love her. Then my other friend, who I already knew had loved me, had gotten very angry at me after seeing the poem. She told me she was over me. I felt horrible. Absolutely guilty. Simply for not loving her, and seeing her so upset. As the depression, stress, anxiety, and general worry grew deeper, I couldn't take it anymore. I started cutting myself, last night, because of the sheer stress. Both arms. I started to hate myself.

Now I feel abandoned by my friend who's angry at me. A fear common with people who have Borderline Personality Disorder, a personality disorder listed in the DSM-IV and upcoming DSM-V, a disorder I possibly have.

But a hug today on the school bus by the one I love solved everything. The problem is that if she saw that hug, she would only be more angry. There's no way to win in this situation. That was very personal, but this poem really moved me, and I ended up going in a ramble, somehow...
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries, I care.
I know everything will get better soon.
Keep you head up.
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HeyArnoldfan7734 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for listening and encouraging me. :)
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, if you need someone, note me.
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:iconheyarnoldfan7734:
HeyArnoldfan7734 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Correction: Thanks for listening to me and encouraging me. Grr, I hate it when I mess up my comments. >.<

If I do need to talk, and I'm in the mood to, then I shall. :)
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Pisces--Dreamer Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate to this so much. Read my mind and my emotions.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Cool, I can read minds! Hope everything goes well.
Thank you.
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:iconpisces--dreamer:
Pisces--Dreamer Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
And I wish everything goes well with you too, you're quite welcome ^^
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