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Lately I've been thinking, if the steps
That I've taken were meaningful at all

I'm not sure if my conscience helps me anymore
Maybe faith is guiding me through this storm

My heart feels like it's being torn
By the one who I've cared about the most
Maybe too short, but I don't want to describe this too much.
I know it could'v been better.

If anything, tell me if quality is dropping.

Relate!
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:iconvoluge:
Voluge Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
No step, no matter how short and irrelevant it may seem, it's not in vain. Conscious both clears things up while also clouding one's sight. If your heart is someone else's and it's being thorn apart, make it beat more clearly so your intent is seen. A thorn heart, gets weaker as time passes by, if nothing is done, you should reconsider who's the owner of it.

If anything, I believe that your test is full of both doubt and hesitation, I haven't read any of your other texts, so I can't tell more than that~
Thanks for giving me a lil bit to read ^^
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you?
No idea what comes before that.
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Vainamoinenian Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If it wasn't so short maybe fewer people could relate to it this much :) So I say it's a good thing that it's short.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Short is better I guess :D
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Vainamoinenian Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) depends on the work actually, but here, yes, short is better)))
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The-Elvenqueen Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it's not too short at all, it's lovely. And I can relate to it :I
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to hear :D
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Relatability isn't dropping a smidge! This is exactly how I feel right now.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's good!
But that's bad...
Push through.
:iconadoration-plz:
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes I don't know what's keeping me going in this "relationship." Sometimes I wonder why I haven't moved on already. And sometimes I just complain on the internet. ;)
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, you have to let it out somehow.
Also, why not just talk about it?
Talking to him should work.
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Usually when I try to talk to people about this kind of stuff it ends up being a misunderstanding and I end up feeling like an idiot. I find it better to just wait it out and later find out that something was wrong but now it's resolved than to demand attention.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I prefer confronting the problem.
That's why, when a person tells me that it's better to wait my mind takes a long time to understand.
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I should be more confrontational. I just have a problem with feeling selfish when in reality I'm just taking care of myself.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There's a lot of way to go.
I just think talking is the easiest and the best.
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DarlingDetermination Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why are you so awesome? :)
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know :icongrin--plz: !
But you, are also awesome.
:iconadoration-plz:
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DarlingDetermination Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well, thank you dear. Awesomeness shared. <3
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DayLightenedDark Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, I can definitely understand this. It's thought provoking, but I think it's perfect in length. This is amazing!
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
:iconadoration-plz:
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DayLightenedDark Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome! :)
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Student Writer
I think it's wonderful short.

I think it brings forth the message
much more powerfully this way.

I really love this, and I can completely
relate. (:

#LiteraryMovement
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconflightlessheron:
flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
you're welcome, dear!
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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful and poignant. :)
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
:iconblushplz:
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BrightBlueWindWitch Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, timing.

I feel you.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sucks that you can, but it's good to be able to relate.

:iconadoration-plz:
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BrightBlueWindWitch Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student General Artist
:hug:
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xUnfortunate-Soulsx Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Writer
Who hasn't felt that way? You put you full trust into someone, never imagining that they'd break you.
To me, it's a brief but accurate piece.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, well...
Life is an elevator, has its ups and downs.

I'm well aware that wasn't a deep phrase.
I just couldn't get a better one Xl
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xUnfortunate-Soulsx Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, come on. Don't push yourself too much.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Me?
Push myself?
Psh, always.

But you can only feel bad if you want to.
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xUnfortunate-Soulsx Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
I understand. Wait, I also do that every bleeding day.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A lot of things comes to mind when you say that...
I don't know which one you refer to!
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xUnfortunate-Soulsx Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
I'm sorry.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No need for that, but, okay.
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Monsterintheshadows Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
This is really good and sometimes that is just what happens between people
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Shouldn't happen too often though.
But, I guess you live to learn.
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Monsterintheshadows Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Yea
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:iconmusicrulesus:
MusicRulesUs Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
at first it sorta reminded me of a Sleeping With Sirens song.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Never heard of it.
Might have to look for it now.
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:iconmusicrulesus:
MusicRulesUs Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
they're the best. that is, if you like punk music.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, I do like punk music.
Though, the only punk music I've heard is the old kind.
Like from Dead kennedys, you've heard of them?
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MusicRulesUs Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
No, I haven't.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's one of those "Old and important" type of bands.
It's old punk, fight the power and such.
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:iconmusicrulesus:
MusicRulesUs Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Ah. I'll make sure to look at it.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And I'll make sure to check that band.
Tell me what you think later!
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