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Love is a strong word
It expresses something that's vastly unknown
Will I be loved or will I ever start?
It'll take some time, but you'll feel it in your heart

No one is loveless; no matter how strong are your thoughts
If you have patience, the right one will be brought
Don't bring yourself down, or your word you'll become
You're beautiful; I know the right person will come

So be as positive as you can
Because one day, you'll have your chance
Just a quick short poem I made, I just felt like it.
How do you think it flowed?
And did you like it and what?

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Bookmouse Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012
I like the flow. It starts with a feeling that many people have, then moves on to encouragement and assurance, ending with a short and loving final thought.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So very true!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The truest !
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The truest of the true?
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:icontruestoryplz: True.
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:icontoastplz: Amen XD
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ColinSydney Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student Photographer
there are attempts of rhyming that for me has failed, like thoughts and brought. but the last line is truly captivating. its an ok poem, with it being a quick short prompt. But i believe you can expand on the whole scenario and make it a little more engaging and make it a longer version.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Now that you mention it, it was a fail attempt :D
I wanted to make it longer but my brain wouldn't let me think of something.
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RaccoonNinja Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
this is great i get that too when i bust out a good poem i am like were the crap did this come from
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