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I can feel the rubble beneath my feet
My eyes are clouded with a fog that restricts me from seeing
For now I feel blind, but from a distance I see a shining figure
Though I seem to be in a malevolent environment, I don’t feel like fleeing

With each step I take, the rubble pierces my feet
Though the pain is sorrowful, faith strengthens my heart
I know I won’t be disappointed with finding someone who shines in the dark
All of this will be worth it; this will be where my happiness starts
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So... Tell me what you think and or feel about this poem!
Have a nice day or night.
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ProsperV Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That was simply stunning. It's one of the few pieces I feel I truly relate to or understand, at least to some degree. I love the vocabulary of this poem; it flows so elegantly together. Keep up the good work.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for the kind words.
Don't know how else to respond.
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zumborocks Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013   Writer
wow
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I guess OWO
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Ember-24 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the way this poem makes me feel. It reminds me of the hope I have! :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm trying to relate to peoples feelings and such :D
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Ember-24 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:hug:
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Y-O-D-H Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The world we live in is dark confused pain. Rare, or deluded, are those who find light in the darkness.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The people who found light are the people who had faith and never gave up.
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the good wishes as it is in fact night to me right now! But that aside, I continue to marvel at how your poetry seems to reflect my life. I'm trying to focus on that shining person at the end of the road, even though the road right now is difficult to walk. Thank you! <3
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I guess we all go through the same problems.
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thatnerdyowl56 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hoo boy, that hit home. *shiver*

...Anywho, wonderful, brilliant work! :squee:
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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camilah Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
:D
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:meow:
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camilah Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
:D
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Shaun-shau Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutely beautiful!!! (perfect for my life right now. so much it's scaring me *shiver*)
BUT this is awesome such great work without using too many words(some things like this go on FOREVER and the author misses the point but this is short, sweet and to the point) bravo! :dummy:
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, try to make them short and sweet.
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