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As I look out the window and see the clouds of smoke
People are leaving their house,

With their face drained of hope

Close by I see people crying,
In the distance I hear people screaming

The worst is happening,
Only this time we’re not dreaming

The faithful are gathering,
Holding hands and praying

The tainted are bargaining,
Taking anything that can be taken

The weak are jumping off buildings,
Leaving blood on the pavement

Large scale of suicides
Whether by knife, gun, or hanging

It’s anarchy out there
And it has only begun

I’m damned to the flames
Because my sins can’t be undone
This poem requested by :iconadmirer4022: !

I would've posted this earlier, but I was moving to the states.
So, forgive me a took longer than expected. 

This is what came to mind when I thought of the end of the world.

Hope I didn't let you down!

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:iconthedarksolidsnake:
TheDarkSolidSnake Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Student Artist
Negative poetry is so much easier to do, wouldn't you agree?
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sadly, yes.
That's why I try to stay away from it. 
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:iconthedarksolidsnake:
TheDarkSolidSnake Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Student Artist
I embrace it. Saddness is just as important to have as joy. If we didnt have sorrow, how would we know what happiness is?
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well for me, I prefer to stay away from it.
Sadness serves no purpose for me. 
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Darvia123 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow that was very dramatic!! Great work, cant wait to see what's next! (PS hope your move was successful) :heart:
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
And it was!

I just have... Kind of a lot of homework now.
But, it's all fine! 
Thanks for your concern! 
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HazyDreamerNeko Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
When I feel exceptionally depressed (as I am now), I see your poem matching the current state of the world. In some sense, anyways...
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh!
Why are you so sad? 
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:iconbellagbear:
BellaGBear Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ahah quite an ironic poem concireding your name :P  Always love epic end of the world  poetry. And I love the last 2 lines
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it!

And I've written darker stuff :D 

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:iconbellagbear:
BellaGBear Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oeh gotta check that out. I like the dark stuff and everything I write tends to go dark :p
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm
Now that I think about it.
Maybe I have written dark things, post never posted them..

So...
Yeah...
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:iconbellagbear:
BellaGBear Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hm somehow it is usually easier to write dark stuff.

is it any good?
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nah, it's kind of old.
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:iconbellagbear:
BellaGBear Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ok. I guess then t is nice to see you;ve learned so  much :)
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:icondarklover33:
DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013   Writer
Wow this is really deep, I love it
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :D!
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:icondarklover33:
DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013   Writer
Your welcome! :)
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:iconflashtrang:
Flashtrang Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, nice poem for the beginning of the end
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you !

:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconhoneygoddess57:
HoneyGoddess57 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Student General Artist
Very well written; in a way I founded this deep but in another I loved it.:love:
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
:iconheehee-plz:
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:iconsupernobodyhome:
supernobodyhome Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Another excellent poem.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconsupernobodyhome:
supernobodyhome Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No prob :)
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:iconshadowisstillalive:
ShadowIsStillAlive Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

Line 12 says "of", when it should be "off".

Sorry, I'm a bit of a grammar Nazi.

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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why say sorry?!
I appreciate it!

Thank you very much.
:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconshadowisstillalive:
ShadowIsStillAlive Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I said sorry because I know it can be a little annoying.

 I'm glad I could help, though!

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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course :D
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Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
Brilliant! :) 
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconanninhaxox:
Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
You're welcome :) 
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:iconmuffeli:
Muffeli Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
What can I say? You make great job once again!
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
:iconheehee-plz:
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:iconmuffeli:
Muffeli Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
No problemFox Emote
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:iconadmirer4022:
admirer4022 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Bleak! Very Blake-esque! I am so pleased you remembered us talking about this! I was curious to see if you'd take it literally or as a paradigm shift and I like what you have done with it. How do you make the mention? I have never been able to figure it out.
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not sure.
I'd search for it on Google.

Also, who's/what's "blake-esque"?

And of course I wouldn't forget!
I'm glad you liked it :D!


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:iconadmirer4022:
admirer4022 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
William Blake! One of the most famous English poets of all time!
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I read his things...
And how did I never know about him!?
Embarrassing!

He's good o-o
And how come you did it remind you of him?
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:iconadmirer4022:
admirer4022 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The vivid, apocalyptic imagery. 
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome then :meow:
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:iconddog101rocks:
ddog101rocks Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is an awesome poem. I am a dummy! 
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :la:!
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:iconddog101rocks:
ddog101rocks Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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randomcatsrfuntolove Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem! Nicely done. :D 
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:icongentlepeace:
GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
:iconadoration-plz:
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:iconrandomcatsrfuntolove:
randomcatsrfuntolove Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome it was a great poem!
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