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My mind disconnects when stars are revealed at night

And millions and millions of planets, so distant and bright

And for us to be told we’re alone in the universe is a lie

There must be another species, that’s something we can’t deny


But some of us, with curiosity filling our minds

Investigates these stars, these planets

Hoping to find something hidden, something new for mankind

But some even fear, that which lies hidden is our end


But I do not know what to believe

They could bring peace, or tragedy

Though, from what we’ve seen, they are their own worst enemy

From these self-proclaimed “human beings”
Yeah... I'm sure this could be... Incorrect, so... Yeah....
This is for :icondaylighteneddark:

Though not sure if I did it right, hope you liked it.
So, tell me what you think?
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DayLightenedDark Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ahh, I'm so sorry for the late comment on this! I haven't been able to comment on this until now.
Anyway, I loved this!! This poem filled me with wonder and awe! All of those stars and planets out there, and maybe other life as well! It's all very mysterious yet wonderful at the same time. Your poem really illustrated this image in my head. I really like how you portray fear of the unknown out there, yet questions about what we don't know. Really beautiful poem. It's really thought-provoking. :D

Thank you so much for writing this! It's not incorrect at all - in fact, I really like how you wrote about the stars and planets! For a prompt, I simply said "the stars in the sky," so you could have went any way you wanted with it! To me, there is no "right way" to write about something when you're coming up with it yourself. But I really did like this. Very much. Thank you again. :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you liked it!
And thank you!
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DayLightenedDark Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes, I loved the poem! :D
No problem - it was my pleasure!
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kartunistaW Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this!  Makes me think of the nights when I gaze up and ask, "Is there someone else out there?".
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A lot of people wonder that.
All I say is, if there is life out there I really hope they are friendly! 
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This has been Featured in :iconpoets-and-warriors:


:)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! 
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angelasdawn Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013
This is very impressive :thumbsup: I especially liked the last two lines, it's great when poets can wrap things up perfectly. Great work!!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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angelasdawn Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
You're very welcome! :)
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, this is right on. I really like this. A lot. It's so... I love the kind of poetry that makes you think because the poem itself doesn't state it's specific meaning, but rather brings up a broad idea. Which is why this poem right here is pretty epic. :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :iconblushplz:
Most of my poems bring up the idea like that :meow:
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silver-sung Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I was looking up at the stars tonight while walking back home, and thinking about this very thing. So this was really cool to read just now. :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Rad :la: !
That has being on my mind for some time now.

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vampiresballad Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
Exhilarating! :D
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:la:!
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SexxyStrawberry Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Student Writer
It's so beautiful Bunny-Emoji-12-(Emoji-Yay)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Flo996 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
I really liked it, I've got a thing for stars :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't we all :D ?
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is quite possible. The entire megaverse is so big that there's bound to be life somewhere, even if it isn't just our universe. (if that makes sense. Sweating a little... )
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It makes sense.
I just hope they are nice, if there is life out there.
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I also wonder if the stories we know of today have happened in other universes. Kinda strange, I know.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I dunno.
I just hope they are friendly and not murder all of us.
Stories... There's a pod somewhere in space with human stuff.
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