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With every word written, with every word spoken
I try my best to express myself, without it being broken
For what I feel is deep in my heart, is love that I want to be showing
Every day it develops, every day I feel more loving

Is the tenderness of passion, which I’ve never felt before
A feeling that I got from a girl who I truly adore
Beautiful as a rose and gentle as a peaceful dove
My heart gets filled with warmth, a feeling I describe as love

She’s the most beautiful girl I’ve seen, that’s as simple as I can be
So very cute and filled with joy, she’s the only girl who I want to see
Her adorable smile that always cheers me up, she’s the only one I need
She’s everything I ever wanted, I thank god that he gave her to me
I had a hard time with finding a title >_<
So if you read this, you can figure it out :D
I dunno what else to say... Leave a comment?

Peace and stay lovely!
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shykittyofART Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's so sweet!
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GentlePeace Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
:iconheehee-plz:
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GentlePeace Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And again... Thanks :iconadoration-plz:
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:iconnoorelven:
And again ... welcome :D
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GentlePeace Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why would you post something so silly in here ;-; ?
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I love this, especially the first verse.
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GentlePeace Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, you're awesome :happybounce: !
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:iconmadhat11d6:
Hello. For the title, I think you have a good idea. I'm usually really bad at titles, but I think that 'The tenderness that is she' would also make for a good title. 'My heart gets filled with warmth which feeling I describe as love' is a bit confusing. Try switching 'which' to 'a' and insert a comma before the 'a'. in the last line is 'have' supposed to be 'gave'? Overall, this is a pretty good piece! Very sweet. =)
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