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With every word written, with every word spoken
I try my best to express myself, without it being broken
For what I feel is deep in my heart, is love that I want to be showing
Every day it develops, every day I feel more loving

Is the tenderness of passion, which I’ve never felt before
A feeling that I got from a girl who I truly adore
Beautiful as a rose and gentle as a peaceful dove
My heart gets filled with warmth, a feeling I describe as love

She’s the most beautiful girl I’ve seen, that’s as simple as I can be
So very cute and filled with joy, she’s the only girl who I want to see
Her adorable smile that always cheers me up, she’s the only one I need
She’s everything I ever wanted, I thank god that he gave her to me
I had a hard time with finding a title >_<
So if you read this, you can figure it out :D
I dunno what else to say... Leave a comment?

Peace and stay lovely!
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shykittyofART Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's so sweet!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
:iconheehee-plz:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013
WOW
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And again... Thanks :iconadoration-plz:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
And again ... welcome :D
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why would you post something so silly in here ;-; ?
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mere-death Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I love this, especially the first verse.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, you're awesome :happybounce: !
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MadHat11D6 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012   Writer
Hello. For the title, I think you have a good idea. I'm usually really bad at titles, but I think that 'The tenderness that is she' would also make for a good title. 'My heart gets filled with warmth which feeling I describe as love' is a bit confusing. Try switching 'which' to 'a' and insert a comma before the 'a'. in the last line is 'have' supposed to be 'gave'? Overall, this is a pretty good piece! Very sweet. =)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, guess I was a bit sleepy when I was typing it XD
I appreciate this comment :D
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MadHat11D6 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012   Writer
You're welcome =)
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SaphirePZ Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This so cute and romantic <3
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much my cute friend :la: !
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Darvia123 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Omawonderfulness. I love this!!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the wonderful comment :la: !
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princesssudi Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Professional Writer
Truly magical and beautiful :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :la: !
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infinitelove143 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovinity: Aww someone's experiencing the wonders of true love :) Good luck to yous. Remember... be her friend!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :la:
And I'll always be there for her :D
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infinitelove143 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovinity: Hehe then maybe it will turn into something beautiful :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's not a maybe, it will :la: !
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infinitelove143 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovinity: Good mind set :)
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SeaLover143 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really beautiful
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you !
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burnedloverose Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Student General Artist
aww i can totally can relate. and if you don't mind me asking did you write this for a special girl?
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yea, for the best and most amazing girl ever.
:icongrin--plz: <-- I really like this face :la: !
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burnedloverose Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Cool i like too lol
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It makes me so happy to know that there are others out there who are feeling exactly the same thing that I am.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy knowing that you're happy :icongrin--plz:
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PrincessKatydid Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And can express it better.
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
STORY OF MY LIFE~ This is exactly how i feel. oh and the dashes my top row of keys and exaggeration points dont work lol sorry
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries, thank you!
I'm glad you could relate to it :la: !
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh i always love to find stuff that relates to me. It makes me feel like im not alone on how people feel and all that.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, I'm here :hug:

Also, :icongrin--plz: <-- Amazing !
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And i thank you for that. Maybe you could check out some of my art "not that its anything special" and fav and comment or even show it off a little bit? But i really like your poems and did you ever think about doing some bases?
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What do you mean by bases?
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MrCoolOrange Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Base is like "the naked people" you see in drawings lol. You just draw clothing or anything on them lol look them up on here!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Never seen one.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very sweet, did you write this for a special girl?
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yea, I always kinda do :D
Thank you, you're sweet :la:
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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WarriorPoetAdam Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
very nice
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very nice as well :D
Thanks!
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MichaelAtaraxia Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lovely. I enjoyed this very much.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :D
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Missdelayingit Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really sweet! And I think your title turned out perfect
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If you think so :D
Thank you!
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