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This cryptic feeling that I’m feeling inside

I don’t know its meaning but it has caught my eyes

I’ve only felt it once, but it’s been made very clear

That since the first time I met you I’ve hold you dear

And it’s so vivid; it’s strange but also great

It’s close to unexplainable, and gentle as a dove

But only few, barely anyone could relate

That the best of her is that she showed me love
It's for this contest [link]
by :iconlive-love-write:

The theme was "The best of you".
Hope you people liked it.

And I was never that good with titles :icongrin--plz:
I also noticed I haven't written romance in a while <: o
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ProsperV Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good lord, I can relate to this shockingly well. It reminds me of one of my closest friends. It's so apparently striking. I love this!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
I try my best to relate to people.
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Heeeey congrats on getting third place!! :D
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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:iconwaiting-for-wings:
waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: see? I knew you could do it!
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:icongrin--plz:
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:iconwaiting-for-wings:
waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconmoesmileplz:
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:iconwaiting-for-wings:
waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yay! you wrote it :D
see, it was good! :D
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I dunno...
Hopefully I'll get to something :s
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
good luck :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yea... I'll need it ;-;
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:iconwaiting-for-wings:
waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Did they extend the date do you know?
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No... They stayed on the 27th.
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waiting-for-wings Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ok, i've submitted mine anyway just wondering :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope you make it :meow:!
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Shaun-shau Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely work once again GP!!!
so poetically done! (that was probably the point of it though huh)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
GP? Reminds me of Adventure Time :D
And thank you!
:iconadoration-plz:
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Shaun-shau Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconohmyglobplz: No problem!!! :iconletmehugyouplz:
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klepter Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think you did good, I like how each line has some symbolisim for feeling or a direct word for feelings; it makes it have a strong deliverance of that emotion to the subject.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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klepter Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your very welcome, keep at it i always enjoy reading your pieces
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :iconadoration-plz:
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klepter Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
Great flow here, but I think you're pulling in way too many ideas and images without expanding on them. So, personally, I'd recommend beefing this up a bit
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What do you mean by beefing?
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
Using each of those lines as starters that you elaborate further on
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So in simpler words... Make it longer? Add some words?
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013   Writer
Well, I mean, there's a lot to be said for minimalism. But simply, yeah. Either pick a single concept to work with or add more so people can more easily connect with what you're going for. :)
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll have to keep that in mind for the next poem I write :D
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