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They say they never work
But we will let them know
It’s hard enough being alone
But it’s even harder without each other
Because, even though you’ve left my side
I can still hear you cry
Fear that brings all the doubts and lies
Forgive me please if I can’t show you my love from so far
Your heart and mine,
They’re fragile by the tides
We’re bleeding and bleeding
With nowhere to hide
We’ve got no home,
When we’re set so apart
But we will let them know
It’s hard enough being alone
But it’s even harder without each other
Because, even though you’ve left my side
I can still hear you cry
Fear that brings all the doubts and lies
Forgive me please if I can’t show you my love from so far
Your heart and mine,
They’re fragile by the tides
We’re bleeding and bleeding
With nowhere to hide
We’ve got no home,
When we’re set so apart
Literature
Love Again
Love Again
I hate to admit-
That I don't stand a chance
All risks turn into rifts-
Our hands will become too...distant
-
I crumbled inside every time I tried-
I couldn't look you in the eyes
A reflection was all I saw-
The beast within me whose heart was still raw
I'm afraid that trust is a one-way street with me
You can only depend on your own
For I have deemed myself unworthy
While I cling onto the tombstones of massacred hopes
I've abandoned the part of my soul
That connected to others
I was forced to let that side of me go
So never again would I fully mourn for another
A sphere of tears-
Floods my sockets with fear
Knowing that-
Eve
Literature
Why Love Is A Four Letter Word
Let me tell you why "love" is
A four letter word
Its so people will overuse it
So they'll say "love"
Every other time they speak
(A secret plot to replace "that")
So it doesn't sound weird
Like an unpronounceable rumble
Of letters for every time
You feel the need to repeat
And repeat
And repeat, those four letters.
("I love love love snickers"
Heard that sentence way too many times)
So we'll be confused by it
So easily replacing two letters
Changing "Like" to "Love"
With a flick of the tongue
So we'll adore the simplicity
Of the word that so easily spoken
Can define the thousands of emotions
We feel for each other
So it can be simila
Literature
I Spent All My Happiness
I spent all my happiness
All those years of saving
Are now useless
As I look
At this heart shaped piggy bank
With nothing inside.
I had changed venues
Tried to hide
All my happiness in you
Thinking maybe you wouldn't notice
The few coins
I stored in your smile
Or the bills hidden in each hug
And the fortunes in each kiss.
I spent all my happiness
Thousand by thousand
For each small butterfly
I felt tingle in my being
Till I finally went bankrupt.
I spent all my happiness
Every single drop
Has been given unto you
And I know
Every investment in you
Is completely worth it
As long as
I can still glimpse your smile.
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Hi, I am critiquing on the behalf of 
First off, I like this poem. I think it is well written and well paced. I really love the last few lines, because I think that's when the poem really picks up and starts to talk about how much it hurts to be separated from each other. And in general, I think that's the only thing you really need to work on-capturing the pain of being apart. I think the stanzas you have are great and the pacing if wonderful, but I think if you chose a few stronger words here and there the poem would be stronger as a whole. For example: set so apart sounds awkward and a little lifeless to me. I think maybe a stronger word then set would help and I think another word would make the ending stronger. Also I find the transition between "I can still hear you cry" and "fears that bring all the doubts and lies" seems a little awkward.
Overall, great piece. Well done!
First off, I like this poem. I think it is well written and well paced. I really love the last few lines, because I think that's when the poem really picks up and starts to talk about how much it hurts to be separated from each other. And in general, I think that's the only thing you really need to work on-capturing the pain of being apart. I think the stanzas you have are great and the pacing if wonderful, but I think if you chose a few stronger words here and there the poem would be stronger as a whole. For example: set so apart sounds awkward and a little lifeless to me. I think maybe a stronger word then set would help and I think another word would make the ending stronger. Also I find the transition between "I can still hear you cry" and "fears that bring all the doubts and lies" seems a little awkward.Overall, great piece. Well done!